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#8Sunday #SnippetSunday: July 20, 2014

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Each week authors from all over and writing in all genres bring you snippets from their work.  It could be a work in progress or a completed piece.  It could be published or not. But it’s only 8 sentences.

A Legacy of Lies, is my paranormal romantic suspense, and it is very much a wip.  Jacob (the hero), is trying to find his missing sister Julia, and her best friend Elissa (the heroine) is determined to help him. My last snippet for this WIP can be read here.

During my last visit, Jacob and Elissa had entered the motel room they’re sharing and commented on the fact there’s only one bed. Elissa has just stepped into the bathroom to take a shower. We are in Jacob’s POV .

 

He let his eyes drift closed, as the lock on the bathroom door clicked into place. Instantly, he was bombarded with images of Elissa naked in the shower, hot water sluicing over perfect body. Not that he knew what she looked like naked, but he could guess—he happened to have a great imagination. And it would be a welcomed change to use it for picturing her, rather than what he’d like to do to his father when he found the man.

The room seemed to shudder as the shower kicked on and the pipes groaned behind the walls. Jacob rolled his head on his shoulders, his neck snapping and popping with each back and forth movement. He had to get Elissa out of his head and focus on his sister. She might think she was old enough, tough enough to take care of herself, but she had to be terrified.

 

You can read all of my past snippets here:  ALL my snippets.

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Enjoy the rest of your weekend! 

Anne

 

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  1. Sarah Cass

    Woah. Intense scene with such conflicting emotions. When will he give in?!

  2. Author Charmaine Gordon

    You’ve captured the whole scene, shower imagery, lust, and worry. So much going on in his heart and mind and you wrapped it up in eight. Thanks, Anne.

  3. Angela Quarles

    Love the detail of the pipes shuddering, kind of adds a subtle layer of subtext. Great description and inner monologue!

  4. Teresa Cypher

    Nice writing. Pulled me into the scene with him. I liked the word, “sluicing”. A not oft-used word! He’s definitely distracted from thinking about his dad and his sister. Nicely done!

  5. lashellcollins

    I love how his mind goes from lusting after Elissa to worrying about his sister. This felt real. Great job!

  6. S.J. Maylee

    The sister! I’ve been entranced by them and totally forgot, lol. Love all the little extras you gave us with sound and emotions. Fab snippet.

  7. veronicascott

    I’m glad to see he hasn’t forgotten his sister, even with all this going on re Elissa. He’s a good brother! enjoying the story, another terrific excerpt.

  8. Millie Burns

    Oh, wow, is it her dad that kidnapped her?

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