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#8Sunday #SnippetSunday: July 27, 2014

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Each week authors from all over and writing in all genres bring you snippets from their work.  It could be a work in progress or a completed piece.  It could be published or not. But it’s only 8 sentences.

A Legacy of Lies, is my paranormal romantic suspense, and it is very much a wip.  Jacob (the hero), is trying to find his missing sister Julia, and her best friend Elissa (the heroine) is determined to help him. My last snippet for this WIP can be read here.

During my last visit, Jacob and Elissa were in the motel room and she’d gone into the shower. We were in Jacob’s POV and he’d hinted at his dislike for his father. The next few lines carry on from last week. Still in Jacob’s POV. And I think this piece will definitely answer a few of your questions.

 

The one man his sister should have been able to trust, who should have loved her unconditionally, had let her down. Jacob shouldn’t have encouraged her fantasies. He never should have let her put that asshole on the pedestal she’d created out of colorful building blocks. But how was he supposed to tell a little gapped-tooth girl that her father was scum? That he’s nothing but thug; a mean, low-down piece of excrement, that didn’t give a flying fuck about his own kids.

And now she’d found out in the worst way. For all those years, Jacob had tried to keep her away from the man, desperate to allow at least one them to pretend they lived a fairy tale existence before it all swirled down the toilet.

Before the day their mother died and the only sunny place they’d known became obliterated by darkness.

 

You can read all of my past snippets here:  ALL my snippets.

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Enjoy the rest of your weekend! 

Anne

 

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  1. Linda Hamonou

    I think you meant “at least one OF them”
    I wonder how she learned it and if he is not underestimating her a little bit.

  2. siobhanmuir

    Ouch. So, so sad. Great snippet, Anne.

  3. Evelyn Jules

    Really powerful and convincing words, Anne. You set the mood so well and I can’t help but want more!

  4. Cara Bristol

    His bitterness really comes through.

  5. Anne Lange

    Thanks Veronica!

  6. jtsuruoka

    Heavy stuff… Well-written too. Very nice.

  7. Karen Michelle Nutt

    What a powerful snippet. I could feel the anger radiated off the screen. Well done!

    1. Anne Lange

      Thank you, Karen! I’m glad you liked it.

  8. veronicascott

    Wow, powerful stuff. I thought this was an amazing excerpt today and I feel sorry for both characters (but not the father obviously!). Can;t wait to read more…

  9. Anne Lange

    Thanks all, for your feedback! :)

  10. sueannbowlingauthor

    Beautiful description.

  11. Author Charmaine Gordon

    Anne, I’m overwhelmed with grief for the kids growing up with such a father. They will overcome all obstacles. Please. You’ve painted a poignant picture.

  12. Millie Burns

    So much raw emotion here. Poor Jacob.

  13. Teresa Cypher

    Wow…so well written, Anne. I feel his anger. And I feel his pain. This story has such a dark background, it leaves so much room for the characters to grow and to overcome what their father did. :-) Good 8!

  14. Heather Boyd

    Your excerpt tugs at my heart. Great description. :)

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